Student: James Higginson
Course: An Introduction to the Internet
Congratulations on your essay James. It’s a substantial piece of work, and you have done well. I realise that the last few weeks on the course have been tough – and it’s to your credit that you’ve stuck at it.
These are my comments, made as I go through the script. Please bear with me, because I am trying to use the marking software, which is a bit temperamental.
&& – indicates where marks have been gained
** – indicates where marks have been lost
Try to avoid posing your argument in the form of questions. Even if they are answered, they usually have the effect of leading away from the question which has been asked.
Very good that you give full references to all your sources. &&
I liked the definitions of LAN and WAN which you put in as links [which worked well]. This shows your exploiting the potential of HTML. &&
[This is a very small detail] I think the references to your sources might look better as footnotes [with links]. This would leave the web essay itself less ‘cluttered’.
I also liked the fact that you made a well-reasoned attempt to ‘answer the question’ [though I was a little surprised that Donald Davies didn’t get a mention].
Your report/essay is thorough, well-executed, and effective. All the links work, and I liked the way you used the horizontal rule to emphasise the structure.
Your plan is good and shows your clear-thinking skills – &&
Your writing is clear, to-the-point, and ‘objective’ – in just the way which is required for academic work. &&
I am also giving you maximum bonus marks for having emailed Vint Cerf. Even though his reply was too late to go into the web essay, I have seen it in the conference, and I think it is in the spirit of the web that you could add it to your assignment.
You have now completed four essays – which means that there’s only the End of Course Assignment to go. You are heading towards successful completion of the course!
Introduction – What is the Internet? – Internet evolution – Father of the Internet
Assignment resources – Essay plan – Definition of terms – Tutor comment
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